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Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 13:03
I love writing short stories and poems and have had a couple published, though recently I have lost the muse!
I'd love to be inspired again in a safe environment, so thought a little bivouac in the woods for us writers might do the trick.

One form I particularly love, is the Villanelle.
Here's one of my attempts

Dawn over the ocean

Day breaks, to the rasp of the seagulls’ cries,
mewing and wheeling through the spume flecked gust,
as the orb of the sun begins its rise.

Cherry-blushed clouds, racing 'cross windswept skies,
dance, bob and billow, as with youthful lust,
day breaks, to the rasp of the seagulls’ cries.

The sea, whispering tongues in breathless sighs,
glows with tints of ochre, gold, red and rust,
as the orb of the sun begins its rise.

Bright stars fade, when light on his charger flies;
as azure hands give Dawn her mighty thrust,
day breaks, to the rasp of seagulls’ cries.

Fishermen, salt caked lips and rheumy eyes,
head for home, sharing silent, secret trust,
as the orb of the sun begins its rise.

It’s the circle of life that never dies;
sure as ashes to ashes, dust to dust,
day breaks to the rasp of the seagulls’ cries,
as the orb of the sun begins its rise.

And here's one by the master, Dylan Thomas, who was born 100 years ago.


Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

And you, my father, there on that sad height,
Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

So come and join me in this little hidey-hole, pick up your quill and share your writings.
Whether it be limericks, haiku, jolly rhymes, free poems, join in here x
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 16:12
Hi Penny, this is going to be an interesting tent. Did you teach yourself or have you been on courses to learn a lot of different verse forms? It must be fun and rewarding to come up with words that both sound beautiful and have a beautiful meaning while following the rules of the particular form. Thanks for putting up the Dylan Thomas. My favourite is "Fern Hill", it sounds so lovely though goodness knows what "he sang in his chains like the sea" actually means!
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 16:53
Wow! very impressed @PennyForthem, :like: , yet another talent you've kept well hidden!
No literary claims myself but do love Dylan Thomas, especially Under Milkwood.
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 17:04
Another talent PFT. Wow!!! Thank you so much for sharing that with us. Stunning! How lucky I am to have a buddy like you. Encore x
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 19:35
Self taught barabarita. Spent a lot of time on the bbc poetry forum when it existed and also uk authors. Harsh critics and stern taskmasters.
Thank you, friends. Do share yours please.
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 19:50
A very talented lady PFT! X :like: xx :like:
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 20:32
On yonder hill stood a wee broon coo,

It must've shifted 'cause it's no there noo,

Unlike our Penny, my words are few,

And that's the best that I can do.......... :shock:



Sorry folks!!!!! Penny, you certainly are a wordsmith par excellence, our diet Laureate, wish I could do half as well, lovely, more please..... :grin:

Ballerina x :heart:
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 20:36
Sorry to lower the tone Penny but Bal already has so..

Little birdy flying high
Drops a message from the sky
Says Farmer Brown wiping his eye
"Damn good job those cows can't fly! " :lol: ( author unknown)
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 22:38
Here is one in progress for me am a newbie so please be kind. One night I stood outside and being mindful this was what I noticed

Twilight

Sunsets Orange
Tree silhouettes
Jasmine perfumes
Birds roost

Cows bellow
Dogs bark
Smoke wafts
Star twinkles

Frogs bop
Sun sinks
Street lights
Night-fires

Owl hoots
Air crisps
House lights
People home

Cats meow
Dinner please
Kookaburra chorus
Night falls

No PFW but it was fun playing with words
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 22:47
Paintsnot only a picture, but a sound sensation xx
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
02 May 2014, 23:03
I love that Penny..very atmospheric @PennyForthem
Would love to hear Roger McGough recite it,think he has the right voice
Ps whats PFW? Any relation to PFT x
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
11 May 2014, 14:51
I thought I would share this with you. Its about an ancestor of mine and his name on the village war memorial. Its not correct as far as the writing goes but its comes from the heart. I have attached it to my family tree.

He was my Uncle

A little girl stands looking at your name
Hand in hand with her Nanna, your niece.
He was my Uncle nanna says with sadness
Again retelling the story, her set little piece.

The girl, now grown, builds up her family tree
One name near her nannas in pride of place
Her great-great Uncle lost in the war
She sees your name but not your face.

She looks into his life ,of the man he had been
A miner from Castle Street living with family
His dad, brothers and married sister
With a 2 year old daughter, the future nanna
Who remembered his name.

No wife for you or children either
So off you went to do your ‘bit’
With other Sherwood Forester solders
Some along with you worked down the pit.

A battle field they call a theatre of war
In a country far away
Soldiers who must gain the ground and not fail
The cold, the mud, endless shelling and the horrors you saw
In the hell hole that was Passchendaele

On October 4th 1917 your life was lost
What suffering did you endure, were you shot.
No head stone for you just your name again
Engraved on a memorial wall in Tyne Cot.

The girl is now a Nanna
With grandchildren of her own
She could take the 5th generation
Standing hand in hand
To tell them the story
Of your name up there
But would they understand

You left behind all those years ago
A family who could only hope
For the safe return of a son and brother
Instead, right here in Yeoman Hill park
Remains the name of a brave Woodhus man
His name was Harry Cope.

Chris x
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
11 May 2014, 16:20
Straight from the heart to the heart. We visited Tyne Cot last November; a moving tribute - thank you for posting this.
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
11 May 2014, 16:57
Lovely @chriso57 what about sending it in somewhere - there are loads of things going on this summer to do with WW1 I'm sure that this would be welcomed and honoured somewhere, especially as it is about a relative. And it's a lovely story about your nanna.
Re: Poets' and writers' bivouac
11 May 2014, 17:01
Thats lovely @chriso57 ..so poignant x
Think @Silverdarlings suggestion is a great one!
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